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Post by Modesty on Jun 30, 2008 17:05:22 GMT -5
For the writers! There's no reason why we shouldn't move on ahead with ideas for the next plot points to cover with the script.
So let's start cooking.
In summary, here's what will happen by the end of the pages currently in progress.
1.) Tai will be back in his original body 2.) Daixx's plan will be foiled for the moment 3.) ALL current characters will be in one place: Ms. Silf's Hideout. XD
The next script should also be the start to the next chapter I think. :3 So ideas for chapter theme might help sort out the next step for the story.
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Post by lazyblue on Jul 10, 2008 11:14:55 GMT -5
Also, Lucius has to get out of the quicksand.
To recap, there are a few dilemmas going on:
1) Lucius in quicksand - Marron wants to get back there to help him, or somehow get help to him. 2) Tai's real body is in a crypt (on an island?), being hunted down by Daixx's two henchmen. 3) Tai's fake body, the fairy and Marron are surrounded by the students, who are being controlled by Daixx
Starting with the third scenario:
- Marron, the fairy and Daixx are the only ones in control of their own bodies, so they're the only ones likely to be speaking (plus Tai) - I like the idea of the fairy trying to jump ship, cuz he suddenly feels like he's on the losing side. - so ...
Fairy: "Hundred to one odds were not part of my contract. I'm outta here!" Tai: *grabs the fairy as he tries to run* "You're not going anywhere! If I die (insert threat here)" - this may allude to why the fairy is working with Tai in the first place (ie. If I die, your whole family dies with me! -> Which is corny, which is why I didn't write it XD)
The fairy works some sort of magic that holds the crowds at bay. Meanwhile, Marron tries to figure out what the heck is going on, in her head. (ie. "So those two are brothers, and that lizard thing on that guy's arm is some sort of demony thing that amplifies his power). Somehow Marron figures out a way to either use Tai or Daixx's power against them (my brain isn't working now so I don't have a good idea of how).
I suppose another idea could be that while Tai and Daixx argue, Marron whispers to the fairy that the only way they will survive this is if the fairy teams up with her. The fairy agrees and does something subtle that causes Tai to lose his grip on Jae, so Tai is sent back to his original body. Then Marron does something to neutralize Bobo's power.
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Post by Azaeziel on Jul 11, 2008 10:45:02 GMT -5
Marron still has the little demon-pet-thing at the end of the current script, right? It would be interesting if it's amplification ability also amplified her anti-demon-possession power as well in some kind of way. Later on in the story that could be used as some kind of anti-possession shield for the entire group maybe? As far as current action, perhaps a theme for the current story could be Mrs. Silf and the students sharing info and realizing that there are secret arenas (or catacombs, those are always cool and hard to draw) under the school that need to be investigated? The combat arenas alluded to back when the introduction exercise was being discussed by Diaxx and his minions?
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Post by Modesty on Jul 11, 2008 14:02:34 GMT -5
Sounds like you fell behind a bit bb. :3 I have the page of Lucius' rescue already posted in the spoiler thread. Just waiting for the rest of Az's pages before I post it.
The current script in production right now starts with Lucius' rescue and ends with everyone getting out of their scrapes and convening at Silf's safehouse.
^^;
@az: They definitely need a way to protect themselves from further possessions. Since Tai or Dai can only use a body ONCE for possession we can say that Lucius, Terran, and Jaes can no longer be possessed by Tai. Joy, Marron and Angelo are not "possessable".
I expected that naturally we'd do an "explain what the heck is going on" chapter for the upcoming rounds. I would say yeah to the suggestion to explore the Underground Arenas (which could literally be underground.
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Post by Azaeziel on Jul 11, 2008 14:30:11 GMT -5
I was mainly thinking underground because the one minion is a minotaur and (unless he goes against stereotype) they prefer underground caves and mazes. Perhaps some part of the island is a remnant from something even older than the schools and that is why the schools were built there originally by Diaxx and Tai's (I forget, father? Grandfather?) and that is why the two are fighting over possession of the island. So, the 'underground arenas' could be part of the older structure and are ultimately what Diaxx and Tai are really trying to gain control of? Just throwing out ideas here really.
I did not know that Tai and Dai can only possess someone once, so in the 'explain what the heck is going on' chapter we might want to either hint at or outright say some of those 'background rules of reality' that 'everyone knows', if you know what I mean.
On another note, I have finished inking the final page of our four and am passing it to Athena this evening for coloration. She is deep in the second one and it should be posted here soon.
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Post by Modesty on Jul 12, 2008 0:14:40 GMT -5
On the page where possessed Lucius is in the boy's room with the Fae, the fae mentions "You can possess a person only once...". That part has already been pointed out. We can reaffirm it somehow.
I like where you're going with the underground structure. :3
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Post by azalea on Jul 12, 2008 1:09:52 GMT -5
Silf being a former student of the institute of magic long long ago...
Silf: You did not just infer that I am old!
Ahem...being a former student Silf might have knowledge of how the buildings have changed in the years thus might know a few hidden rooms and secret passages around the school >_> I say Silf's hide out might be one of these places, Maybe it was a spot her and Julios made and hid with wards and charms, so they could be alone together, since they were best friends in school...If that's the case likely Daixx and Tai wouldn't know of it.
Tyde hasn't been possessed yet, and Tai's brain with Tyde's strength's and talents probably wouldn't be a fun thing to deal with, since using water Tyde could keep his distance from Marron. And his reverse healing isn't something to take lightly either >_> would be especially dangerous if Tyde was possessed near a large water source. I have no problem with Tyde going to the dark side for a little while ^__^
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Post by Modesty on Jul 12, 2008 13:46:30 GMT -5
Good to keep in the back pocket. I think once Daixx realizes that Tyde was THE one to hurt Pookey and stop his plan (which by the way makes him lose however many souls he possessed with Pookey he can't possess again. I think. I mean that sounds fair enough.) Tai has possessed: dead student, distracted silf, Terran, Lucius and Jaes. Daixx has now possessed: Silf, Afanen, plus X number of random NPC students. Posessed chart! | Daixx | Tai | Unavailable | Already possessed | Silf, Afanen, gym full of students | Dead Student, Silf, Terran, Jaes, Lucius | Angleo, Marron, Joy | Can still possess | Tyde, kai, Jaes, Finn, Miria, Lucius Sylphi | Tyde, Kai, Miria, Afanen, Sylphi | " |
Limits on Tai: He's now in his original body in the morgue. Kind of trapped until someone comes to release him or he releases himself. He also needs a new hiding place for his body. That's why he's not bothering with his brother right away. Limits on Daixx: Tell me how you think this sounds, Daixx's powers are weaker than Tai's or were further sealed. He has to have pookey to possess anyone at all. This makes it so he has to be more creative when making plans. Like using the resources below the school on the ancient ruins. Great work so far guys. azzy, I definitely think the next chapter should start with a Silf semi-flashback explanation of things changing. It would be awesome if maybe you could rough out some things she might say.
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Post by azalea on Jul 15, 2008 22:14:13 GMT -5
I'd be happy to rough it out
. Are there any particle details that maybe I should try to work in? Like any previous wars or feuds?
Maybe a past students account of the disappearances of the previous heads of the schools?
Maybe an underground of students that secretly built the majority of the hidden passages ? Like a hidden Guild of past students that tried to ensure no future students ever had to be forced to fight or be pawns in a hidden feud or something and that if it did happen that the students could have a means of defense and escape?
underground or buried and forgotten classrooms that Silf knows the entrances to?
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Post by Modesty on Jul 16, 2008 17:27:41 GMT -5
She should mention that the disappearances are a somewhat recent development that happened AFTER the Heads of School disappeared.
So something alluding to that the schools were perfectly normal before, she heard this from a much older student. But when she came bad things started happening. She should have started school just a few years after they disappeared.
Hmm...I think further flash back is needed to clarify this. I think this is where Joy or Angelo can pontificate on the ancient history of the schools. :3 Just to make things more official and clear.
^^ I think we should title this new chapter "Underground". I would be leery about a guild of students. That just seems too convenient. It's more interesting if it's just our group of characters (and maybe a few curious bystanders.)
Also I think we may run into the danger of adding more characters to our already full cast if we add the guild. What we may want to do is add more antagonists that would essentially be cannon fodder.
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Post by Modesty on Jul 25, 2008 16:22:57 GMT -5
I'm going to start roughing out a script. Well...maybe after this weekend. This weekend I'll be busy. I have like 3 trips planned. ;D
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Post by Modesty on Aug 23, 2008 20:04:39 GMT -5
Okay...the next few posts will be the rough draft of the next script. Most of this is based on what was discussed here...some of it was divine inspiration. j/k. We also need a cover for this chapter. Call it "Underground". I thought it would be interesting to start this next chapter with the bad guys first. >_> Can anyone spot the innuendo? XD ---Daixx's office Kero returns to the office with an bleary eyed Daixx. Sable is at the ready. S: What's going on? Why wasn't I alerted to the situation? K: There wasn't enough time to properly prepare. Help me with him will you.
Daixx is in his chair. K kneels before Daixx stroking his hand. K: Master, forgive us for not assisting you in time. Please tells us what to do next. S: I will start the hunt for your enemies, Master.
Daixx seizes Kero's wrist roughly. D: No...no not now. There is something much more important that needs seeing to.
K looks amazed. S is quizzical. D still has K's hand. D (off panel): Let them think they have won for now. K: Master...
Daixx grins evilly and makes Kero's hand stroke his face. D: Right now...I am in desperate need of nachos...extra spicy dip this time. (chibi corner: *Kero blushes* Oh master Daixx. Sable rolls his eyes. Disgusting (optional))
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Post by Modesty on Aug 23, 2008 20:10:47 GMT -5
This part is very long and meanders. It is the part most in need of help and refinement. The key parts I want in here are: Silf's Flashback Marron's lecture on possession Marron's power and weakness revealed. (I almost added the joke that they engaged in dangerous sex instead of safe sex to upset Ms Silf...but that's pushing it. Plus it was Lucius' idea so that meant is was a bad idea to begin with. ) I hinted at Tyde's suggestion to be a mole for the other side. But I'm not sure it's necessary based on what I did for the NEXT part. Also...sorry I totally forgot Miria! She should probably have a few more lines than what I gave her. --Underground-- Marron and Lucius embrace. Angelo and Slyphi comment. M: Oh Lucius...thank goodness you're alive. L: Oh Pooky... Pookey: (Oh my gods...He can't mean me!) A *grins at Slyphi* S: Ugh...please.
Af settled against a wall with rune paintings drinking a cup of soup. Silf handing soup to Tyde. Af: What is this place, Silf? I've never seen this place before and I thought I knew my way around the island. Silf: Heh...it was a little hideout my friend and I found when we studied here. We should be very safe here. It's reinforced by powerful ancient magic.
Terran loads a gun. Kai looks annoyed. T: Yeah, as much respect as I have for you Silf, I don't trust in magic. K: No kidding. Doesn't make sense.
Angelo hands Slyphi her soup. Slyphi looks a bit miffed. A: This place is well hidden anyway. It won't appear on radar or heat sensors because it's so close the volcano. Sl: I trust magic just fine. So what are we suppose to do here? We can't just hide here. It's only a matter of time until we're found.
Silf lectures. S: That is why we all need to understand what is really going on. Daixx and Tai's return was actually long expected and even hoped for. You see there were always disappearances when I was a student here.
*flashback mode* Faceless Older student. Young Silf and Julios. "When it first started happening, Julios and I tried to investigate. We learned from some of the older students that this never happened when Daixx and Tai were in charge. It only started happening after they left."
Kero and Sable with the school banners behind them. "We figured it had something to do with the new directors, but there was no evidence. There was no motive that we could think of."
Silf in military uniform. "I returned here after serving in the military, but it had changed somehow. The missing students were less frequent and more due to accident than anything. It was believable and there did not seem to be any pattern."
Silf and the dead student. "Until recently. Whatever was going on behind the scenes was coming out into the open. Fervently I wished that the owners would return. I knew they were alive. I believed they would stop this madness."
Daixx with Kero and Sable. "But I was dead wrong."
Afanen looks thoughtfully into her cup. Af: You believe that Daixx and Tai were behind this all along?
Silf folds her arms. Angelo scratches his chin. S: That's my gut reaction. I'm actually thinking that Kero and Sable are pulling most of the strings. Seemed pretty obvious there's a tie between Kero and Daixx at least. A: Tai used to own the IMA and Kero took over. If Kero is loyal to Daixx the owner of the OTI, that would explain a bit of Tai's motive.
Slyphi flexes her arm. Angelo panics. Sl: That's great and all but we should figure out how to beat them first. Strike our enemy before they have a chance to strike you. That's what I do. A: Don't move so much! You're still hurt!
Pookey sitting on Lucius head. Lucius looks up annoyed. Marron interjects. L: No pooping up there ya hear. P: (Oh this is fluffier than Daixx's head.) M: There's something important you're overlooking. Daixx and Tai are brothers.
Marron looks a bit unsure of herself. Kai looks annoyed and so does Terran. K: What's that got to do with anything? T: Seems superfluous. M: Um...what I mean is...ah...
Joy speaks up after bandaging Jaes' head. Jaes silent. J: It does matter. When the schools were founded it was by their grandfather who was dedicated to education and brought up his grandsons the same way. Daixx and Tai received the schools as gifts when he passed on. So what their rivalry is about is very crucial.
Tyde jumps up. T: Exactly. That way we can pit them against each other and distract them from killing students. It's an advantage we need.
Terran sets down her cup. Silf leans against the wall patiently. T: Still, we won't find that out unless we have their inside information. Even I don't have that...even though I shared minds with Tai. Silf: That is a danger. Their power of possession is our greatest problem. We won't know who we can trust or who could be under their control.
Marron takes Pookey off Lucius' head. Pookey (NO! I was finally achieving Nirvana!) M: Th-there is a way to protect ourselves. You see, a demon can only possess a person once unless they have a pact. L: Lucky us eh. Since Daixx possessed several people with Pookey here, there are about 300 students he can not possess again.
Afanen smiles. Tyde grins Af: That makes for a good hearing. Marron, you specialize in anti-demonic magic do you not. T: Really? Awesome! Then we have nothing to worry about.
Marron giggles nervously. M: Well...I do have experience with...um...dealing with demons. Since some of us have already been possessed we don't have to worry. There are also some creatures who are unable to be possess because of what they are...Angelo for example. Pookey (Understatement. You could've crushed them both!)
Slyphi glares at him. Angelo rubs the back of his head and grins. A: Right. Terra-Angel's minds are too complex for demons to grasp. Sl: Please stop trying to be modest. (lol that's me.)
Focus on Joy and Kai. M: Right. Anyone with a strong mind or will can repel a possession, unless they are severely distracted or overly-emotional.
Silf looks to Afanen. Silf: Then lets figure out who has been possessed so far so we know who to protect. Af: Yes. You and I were already Possessed by Daixx in the Gym.
Jaes and Terran and Miria. T: I was possessed by Tai after the Golem fight. I think he got Silf then for a bit too. J: I don't know who had me...must've been Tai.
Lucius blushes. L: I was hit by Tai.
Slyphi, Kai, Miria and Tyde. Slyphi: That means me, Miria, Attitude, and Beach Boy are the only ones who have not been touched by either...and Angelo doesn't count nor does Joy apparently. T: That means we have to be extra careful...OR...
Close up of a devious looking Tyde. T: Someone can willingly go to the other side to get information.
Silf bops him on the head. S: Don't be daft, that's too risky. T: Ow. Hey... M: (off panel) I think I can help a bit.
Pookey sits stiffly on Marrons arm. Her eyes are glowing and so are her tattoos. Lucius backs away nervously. M: It seems the lesser demon augments my power too. I can neutralize any possessed person and possibly drain the magic out of those demons.
Tyde jawdrop. Afanen wide-eyed. Silf looks thoughtful. T: Holy Mackeral! That's flippin' sweet! Af: Marron! You can't...you're... S: Perfect.
Silf smirks. S: It will be very dangerous for you if they find out about this ability. So Marron must be protected at all costs. Tyde, Slyphi, and Kai should remain close to her so she can protect them.
Afanen looks angrily at Silf. Af: You're risking too much. Marron should not strain herself. S: I feel confident in her ability. If she's surrounded by friends the demons won't be able to touch her. Af: But she's not at full capacity now. S: She can rest. Af: That's not it...she's...
Marron touches her stomach and blushes. Lucius has her arm around her shoulders. L: She's going to have our baby. I won't let anyone near here...no one. M: Lucius can protect me. He has...talent. As long as we're near each other.
Angelo claps. Slyphi facepalms. Tyde blushes. A: Oh congratulations you two. This is so exciting. I'll help make sure you stay healthy, Mrs. Lux. I love babies. S: No...words... T: woah...
Terran stretches. Te: Well...that's a factor. We can go over more plans later. We should recharge while we can.
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Post by Modesty on Aug 23, 2008 20:12:19 GMT -5
This is the part I added based on azzy's suggestion to turn Tyde to the dark side. *** Everyone settles in to sleeping bags except Tyde who is awake. He's thinking to himself. T: (Demons can possess a person only once, I'm sure she can still cure me even if she's pregnant.)
Glances at a sleeping Silf. T: (I know it's risky, but it's the quickest way to find out what's going on. I'm probably the best candidate
because of what I know already.)
Silouetted in the darkness with a light around him. T: (I am only really dangerous if I'm in a moist environment or near water. Even so, Miria can counter my techniques well enough.)
close up of Tydes face. eyes closed in determined thought. T: (Angelo could probably counter my reverse healing spells and he can't be possessed so I can't really hurt anyone permanently. Kai knows me pretty well too he'd be able to tell the others what I've done. He's smart he'll figure it out.)
Close up of Tyde's eyes opened and determined. T: (I've made up my mind. Sorry Silf, this is a risk I'm willing to take for the team.)
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Post by Modesty on Aug 23, 2008 20:14:17 GMT -5
This is the last bit I wrote. This at least sets thing up properly for whatever happens in the rest of the chapter. ;D Plus the idea of Tai being in pieces like a zombie was just too fun!
--Morgue-- Drawers on the wall. A banging noised comes from one of them.
A boot bangs off one of the drawers.
A disgruntled Tai pokes his head out holding his leg in one hand. Tai: Go figure, he'd leave me in pieces. What an jerk. He knows me too well.
Tai drops his legs onto the floor. and one arm. Tai: Well...I'm not beat yet. He forgot to cut off my head. Still...
One armed torso lands on the pile of parts. Tai: This is going to be REALLY difficult.
Tai looks off panel. SFX: Creak. Tai: Hm...Finn...is that you? Hurry up and get me out of here.
Tyde stands in the doorway. Ty: That's why Sable tried to send Kai and me here. Now it makes sense.
Tai holds his cheek in one hand and the hand on the floor has the palm facing Tyde. Tyde frames the panel. Tai: And who my you be, sir. Wait...No I should know...they call you Tydaris Syndication. "Tyde". Fitting name for a Siren. What can I do you for?
Tyde crouches to be eye-level with him. Tyde: You owned the IMA Right? Tai: You know your history. Good. What about it? Tyde: Well...don't you want it back?
Tai grins mischieviously. Tai: young man...you are in no position to bargain with me. You have only one thing I want and that's a body. As you can see, mine is in a bit of a sad state. I am no fool. There is no reason for you to come here. You have no loyalty to me.
Tyde grins...(just show the mouth. Tyde: Right...you weren't there when I destroyed the lesser demon with my Reverse healing. It was a splendid show. Daixx was most put off since that meant over 300 wasted possessions.
Tai sighs and holds out both palms. Tai: You're cleverer than I thought. I'll find out your motive soon enough, for now stay close to me.
Back of Tai's head. Hand held up in offering. Tyde grins nervously. Tai: any chance you have skill with a needle and thread? Tyde: Sorry. Tai: Well...then you better haul my arse out of here.
Humorous frame of Tyde carrying Tai. Tai kicking him in the sides with his dislocated feet. Tai: Faster mule. Tyde: (Once the muscle...always the muscle. I've got to stop working out so much.)
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